Peer Review Example
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story, look for the sample comments that follow.
"Grandfather's Journey From China to Santo Domingo"
I have often wondered about my Chinese grandfather. He died before I
was born, and my family has never really said much about him. Someday I
would like to go to China and find what is left of my Chinese family. But
for now, I have to be satisfied with the few stories my father has told
My grandfather left China for Santo Domingo in 1916 with two
relatives. His father had been a wealthy merchant, and two of his sons
decided to go in search of new horizons. They settled in the Dominican
town of Bonao and opened a restaurant called "Sang Lee Long." Even though
it had a Chinese name, the restaurant served Dominican food and was very
My grandfather's name was Luis Sang. He never told anyone in our
family his Chinese name. He had gone through an arranged marriage in China
and left his wife and two sons behind when he moved to the Dominican
Republic. In his new country he married again and had 10 children: 7
daughters and 3 sons. My father was one of them.
Grandfather's restaurant got most of its business from travelers. But
when the old highway that had united the south of the Dominican Republic
with the capital closed in late 1959, Bonao was isolated. As a result, my
grandfather's restaurant went bankrupt. He stayed home after that and
never opened another restaurant.
(This story, by Karina Sang, was first published in New Youth
Connections and can be found in Writers Inc.)
When reading your essay, I heard that, although you never
met your grandfather, you are interested in who he was and what his life
was like. He moved to the Dominican Republic from China, got married and
had ten children. He opened a successful restaurant, but when the tourists
no longer passed by his town, the restaurant went bankrupt.
I noticed you showing the relationship between your
grandfather's life in China and his life in the Dominican Republic. I also
noticed how well you described the sacrifices he made by moving. For
example, you went into detail about what his father had been, and about
the family he left behind. I noticed that you began the story by telling
us why it was important to you, and by making us curious about your
Finally, I wondered about the Chinese family he left behind.
Did he ever contact them again? Did he miss them? I wondered if you could
have told us more about that. Also, why did your grandfather just stay at
home after his restaurant went bankrupt. I wondered how he was able to
support himself, and why he didn't try to open another restaurant. What
was your father's relationship to your grandfather? Does your father have
the same curiosity about his Chinese heritage that you do?
Thanks for letting me read your story.
Bob the Peer Reviewer
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